Mayb Next time?
i see that this was your first atempt! nnot bad. i see that you were going for a story...it was a little too texty though! that was my only prob!, and next time! make it a litter voilent! and add some humor into it
Mayb Next time?
i see that this was your first atempt! nnot bad. i see that you were going for a story...it was a little too texty though! that was my only prob!, and next time! make it a litter voilent! and add some humor into it
Nice
For once, someone actullay did a flash about a very serios problem everyone faces on the way home at 12 oclock on a friday night. I live in Huron County in Ontario and Underage drinking and driunking in general is an extream problem and this topic realy made me thing aboubt this kind of thing, keep up the good work man i liked it.
Wow....someone who actually appreciates it. Thanks, you've made my day!
By a) not critizing the phrases used.
b) not saying 'Use a storyline, like a guy driving home...blah, blah, blah'
c) getting the message whilst NOT living in the UK.
Umm...idk...
See this is my prob. its too fast... the writing oviasly goes by increadably fast, and the story dind't make alot of sence...But still good job... my advice is make it way longer, improve your writing, because i am guessing that your going for a big story here, so yeh.
Shut up shahriar lol... I can read the text fine, I don't see the problem.
Random!
umm im not too sure what it ment but...i liked the randomnuss of the ending.
IT MEANT THIS IS A REAL CRISIS THAT KILLS FORTY MILLION MEN WOMEN AND CHILDREN-CHAN A DAY IN ASIA ALONE
This is a <i>crisis</i> which only YOU can stop!
Smokers are nazis and asians are jews. ANNE FRANK - NEVER AGAIN!
WOULD YOU LET THE FOURTH REICH, THE REICH OF THE CIGARETTE SWASTIKA, SPREAD ITS REIGN OF TERROR TO THE POOR DEFENSELESS HAIRLESS CHESTED LITTLE PEOPLE OF ASIA? <i><b>WOULD YOU LET THAT HAPPEN??</b></i>
Nice
Its good, its more like a tease, make one soon man i'll be looking forward to it =)
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